Improvement: The Sequal

After peer review, I received new insight on my paper. Most of it was what I already knew. What piqued my interest was how the reviewer said that I had to many commas. I have always been encouraged to use commas when I think they should belong. Mainly, because there are so many grammar laws about them that it is easy to forget one or five of them. But now my roommate wants me to hurry up so I have to summarize quick. The reviewer like the way I set up the narrative and how it progresses while I age.